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Homework: Write an essay Ensuring that children have regular physical exercise should be the responsibility of parents and therefore schools should not waste valuable school time having sports lessons as part of the curriculum. To what extent do you agree.

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In the modern day offsprings should have a regular physical
exercise
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. Some people believe that it should be
parent's
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the parent's responsibility
responsibility
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, while other believes that it should be
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school's
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the school's responsibility
responsibility
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. In
this
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 essay I will give discuss both views and give my own opinion. On the one hand, regular physical
exercise
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 should be the
responsibility
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 of
school
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, as children spend
majority
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the majority
a majority
 of their time at
school
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.
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, physical
exercise
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 between
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school's
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school
 lessons, can infix their immunity.
Secondly
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, physical
exercise
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 at
school
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 can rely schoolmates between themselves.
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, a joint soccer game, will develop a team
sprit
the vital principle or animating force within living things
spirit
 between schoolmates.
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, regular physical examination should be the
responsibility
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 of parents, as they can find for their children the best place for training.
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, children want to play baseball, so parents will find for them the best team and best trainer. In my opinion, regular physical
exercise
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 should be the
responsibility
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 of
school
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 and parents, as
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exercise
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an exercise
 between
school
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 lessons important, but
school
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can not
can not
cannot
 find for children the best trainer, but parents can. In conclusion, there are convincing arguments on both sides of the debate,
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, I believe that physical
exercise
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 should be the
responsibility
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 of academy and parents

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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