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Band 5.5

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter  Correct the information in the article  Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information  Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

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ear Sir/ Madam My name is Shayan Jafari. I have been living in Sydney from my birth time like my ancestor and I know
this
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city
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 better than anyone. I read an article in the
last
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 version of your
magazine
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 and I am writing to express my
complain
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 about the wrong information which was written on that. In the
last
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 number of
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the magazine
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magazines
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magazine
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,magazine
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 you wrote an article about a lake in the middle of Sydney. Unfortunately, I have to say that
lake
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the lake
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 does not exist in the middle of Sydney. I have to say that
lake
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the lake
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located
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 in the
suburb
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 area of the
city
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 which you have to drive for 40 minutes to reach that place. Needless to say that,
this
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city
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 is a destination for many tourists every each year and giving wrong information not only
it
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might mislead them in
this
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city
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, but
also
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 decrease the satisfaction rate of your
magazine
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 in the long-term. Given the situation, I would like to suggest that, in
new
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the new
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 version of your
magazine
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 you allocate some space to describe the mistake which happened in
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last
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 version and
moreover
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, apologize
both
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citizen
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citizens
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 of
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city
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 and your readers. Sincerely yours, Shayan Jafari

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rectify
  • Misrepresentation
  • Tourism
  • Editor
  • Credibility
  • Accuracy
  • Local heritage
  • Fact-checking
  • Repercussions
  • Counteractive measures
  • Publishing ethics
  • Clarification
  • Factual error
  • Misconception
  • Authenticity
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