You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter  Correct the information in the article  Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information  Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

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ear Sir/ Madam My name is Shayan Jafari. I have been living in Sydney from my birth time like my ancestor and I know

this

city

better than anyone. I read an article in the

last

version of your

magazine

and I am writing to express my

complain

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about the wrong information which was written on that. In the

last

number of

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the magazine

a magazine

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magazines

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magazine

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you wrote an article about a lake in the middle of Sydney. Unfortunately, I have to say that

lake

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the lake

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does not exist in the middle of Sydney. I have to say that

lake

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the lake

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located

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in the

suburb

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suburban

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area of the

city

which you have to drive for 40 minutes to reach that place. Needless to say that,

this

city

is a destination for many tourists every each year and giving wrong information not only

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apply

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might mislead them in

this

city

, but

also

decrease the satisfaction rate of your

magazine

in the long-term. Given the situation, I would like to suggest that, in

new

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the new

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version of your

magazine

you allocate some space to describe the mistake which happened in

last

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the last

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version and

moreover

, apologize

both

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citizen

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citizens

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city

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and your readers. Sincerely yours, Shayan Jafari

Tue May 05 2020

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thirdly
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moreover
also
for example
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therefore
however
although
even though
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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

198 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Rectify
Misrepresentation
Tourism
Editor
Credibility
Accuracy
Local heritage
Fact-checking
Repercussions
Counteractive measures
Publishing ethics
Clarification
Factual error
Misconception
Authenticity

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

You recently moved to a new house and you want to invite a close friend to stay with you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: invite him to stay and suggest a date briefly describe the new house and garden say why you like your new house.

chools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students find a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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