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IELTS Writing Tsk 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: In poor families, teenagers may have to work part-time as well as study. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this for these teenagers. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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There are a lot of poor families who send their children to work part
time
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 while studying. In needy families, juveniles may have jobs while they are still studying.
This
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 essay will discuss the positive and negative aspects of teenagers who have jobs while they are studying. The major advantage of teenagers to have jobs while they are studying is
learned
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learning
 to be independent and responsible.
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, the teenager must manage his
time
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 between studying and his job
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help
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helps
 him to be more culpable. Another example is the teenager should work and depend on his self without any help that makes him nonpartisan. On
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the other hand
, teenagers may not have enough
time
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 to study or hang out with friends
.
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It is hard
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for
 them to find a
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 to study because they are busy with the job and that affect their
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results
 in exams. They cannot hang out with friends
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 make them sad and lonely. In conclusion,
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 teenagers part
time
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 work while they are studying have a certain negative effect that they don’t have ample
time
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 to study or play with friends. It has a positive influence on a teenager ‘s
life it
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life, it
 makes them autonomous and answerable.

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