You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph illustrates the expenditure on
books
in Germany, France, Italy and Austria over a period of ten years 1995 to 2005.
Overall
, from the graph
we can see that the lowest figure was in Austria in 1995. Add a comma
,graph
However
, Italy had the lowest of
spending in 2005.
From 1995 to 1999, the number of people Change preposition
apply
bought
Correct pronoun usage
who bought
books
in Germany increased slightly from 80 to 90 millions
. Change to singular
million
Nonetheless
, in 2003 the figure experienced a slight decrease from 90 to 85 millions
Change to singular
million
then
rose sharply to 95 millions
by 2005. The same trend was in Italy, Change to singular
million
total
Add an article
the total
expense
of Italian had Fix the agreement mistake
expenses
a
growth from 50-55 Remove the article
apply
millions
Change to singular
million
then
went down slightly to 50 millions
by 1999. Change to singular
million
Nevertheless
, from 1999 to 2005 the amount of money grew steadily to 62 millions
. People in France Change to singular
million
also
bought more books
between 1995 to 1999 from 55-60 millions
and Change to singular
million
then
from 1999 to 2005 had an upward trend to 75 millions
. Change to singular
million
Finally
, in Austria, there was a growth from 30-40 millions
from 1995 to 1999 but Change to singular
million
1999
to 2001 the figures remained stable. Change preposition
from 1999
By
2001 to 2005, the amount of consumption Change preposition
From
on
Change preposition
of
books
had a significant surge from 40-72 millions
.Change to singular
million
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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