You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The line graph illustrates the expenditure on
books
in Germany, France, Italy and Austria over a period of ten years 1995 to 2005.
Overall
, from the
graph
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we can see that the lowest figure was in Austria in 1995.
However
, Italy had the lowest
of
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spending in 2005. From 1995 to 1999, the number of people
bought
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books
in Germany increased slightly from 80 to 90
millions
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million
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.
Nonetheless
, in 2003 the figure experienced a slight decrease from 90 to 85
millions
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then
rose sharply to 95
millions
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million
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by 2005. The same trend was in Italy,
total
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the total
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expense
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of Italian had
a
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growth from 50-55
millions
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then
went down slightly to 50
millions
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by 1999.
Nevertheless
, from 1999 to 2005 the amount of money grew steadily to 62
millions
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. People in France
also
bought more
books
between 1995 to 1999 from 55-60
millions
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and
then
from 1999 to 2005 had an upward trend to 75
millions
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.
Finally
, in Austria, there was a growth from 30-40
millions
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from 1995 to 1999 but
1999
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to 2001 the figures remained stable.
By
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2001 to 2005, the amount of consumption
on
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of
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books
had a significant surge from 40-72
millions
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million
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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