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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that high school curriculum should consist of volunteering
work
 and pupils
also
 ought to do it free of charge. Personally, I completely agree with
this
 view through the following reasons. There are various benefits that students could gain from working in community services.
First
, by doing voluntary
work
, they can learn how to interact with others and
work
 in a team.
Moreover
, they
also
 know how to manage their time effectively and improve their organization skills.
For instance
, youngsters can participate in several voluntary projects with some quite comfortably specific tasks
such
 as knit or crochet blankets to be donated to the orphanage or homeless shelters, put few cheerful performances for handicapped children in hospitals, share with residents
at
Suggestion
in
 a
nursering
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nursing
nursery
 home, join in the cleanup of a local river, pond, lake, and so forth. Even those are small works, young people still largely broaden their horizons by communicating with new people in new places and
also
 strength their compassion for others. By boosting
teenagers
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teenagers'
 necessary
work
 activities with
charitable
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charities
 or community organisations, they will be likely to do something more creative and efficient.
In particular
, groups of volunteers would come up with numerously valuable activities. More specifically, they can create a summer reading program to encourage kids to read more, design events to promote some introverted students make friends or be more energetic and integrate with
community
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the community
communities
, organise a self-
defense
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
 workshop or collect unused makeup to donate to a
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
Center
 of abused women, conceive a TV or radio public service announcement against drug and alcohol use, etc. It is beneficial for someone whose skills gained through compulsory
work
 to increase their employability by setting it in their CV.
This
 is simply due to the fact that the recruiters not only select eligible staffs for their businesses or organisations but
also
 helpful for the society. To sum up, I strongly believe that it is an immensely brilliant idea and I hope that
this
 programme put into action for high schools in a near future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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