Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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There have been immense advances in the sphere of technology in most aspects of people’s lives, especially in the field of social media.Nowadays, an increasing number of people rely on computers and mobile phones to communicate, studying or working purposes.Some people believe that usage of
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internet
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the internet
very harmful for humans and there are
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drawbacks too. Some people argue that, the role of socialize started to fade because highly developed technologies has undergone many changes, from the time the there were not harmful and dirty sides of
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the internet
.In these days when people can face with a lot of problems, as crimes, thefts and violences, which are happening through using of
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the internet
.
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, in Mexico, burglars stole about 2million dollars through access of online banking,
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, currently, the government of Mexico are suffering from bankruptcy, because thousands of people returned or closed their bills,
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, millions of employers lost own position.
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,
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social media
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impact people behaviour, mainly Facebook and Instragram alter minds of people,
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, now more than ever, people become antagonistic and the proportion of camaraderie
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decreased, especially, teens suffer from
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problem.Currently, significantly larger number of youngsters addicted to mobile phones in our worldwide, certainly it is pity for our generation.
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, we use technology devices more than the limit in average adults need to use phones less than 2,5hours, but, currently, normal resident is utilizing more than 5 hours, it is becoming fashion or trend for them.
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, every they post one picture in
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or change with new ones, if though they superstar, it depends
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depend on children's behaviour, as well. To sum up, I believe that, there are clear reasons why
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the internet
and social media are harmful for every individual and these will bring negative attitudes which strictly affect on human.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • glamour
  • wealth
  • achievements
  • portrayed
  • overshadow
  • influenced
  • lifestyles
  • unrealistic
  • expectations
  • values
  • promoting
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • inspire
  • positive impact
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