Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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There have been immense advances in the sphere of technology in most aspects of people’s lives, especially in the field of social media.Nowadays, an increasing number of people rely on computers and mobile phones to communicate, studying or working purposes.Some people believe that usage of

internet

Suggestion

the internet

very harmful for humans and there are

also

drawbacks too. Some people argue that, the role of socialize started to fade because highly developed technologies has undergone many changes, from the time the there were not harmful and dirty sides of

internet

Suggestion

the internet

.In these days when people can face with a lot of problems, as crimes, thefts and violences, which are happening through using of

internet

Suggestion

the internet

For example

, in Mexico, burglars stole about 2million dollars through access of online banking,

in addition

, currently, the government of Mexico are suffering from bankruptcy, because thousands of people returned or closed their bills,

as a result

, millions of employers lost own position.

On the other hand

Accept space

social media

also

impact people behaviour, mainly Facebook and Instragram alter minds of people,

furthermore

, now more than ever, people become antagonistic and the proportion of camaraderie

also

decreased, especially, teens suffer from

this

problem.Currently, significantly larger number of youngsters addicted to mobile phones in our worldwide, certainly it is pity for our generation.

Besides

, we use technology devices more than the limit in average adults need to use phones less than 2,5hours, but, currently, normal resident is utilizing more than 5 hours, it is becoming fashion or trend for them.

For example

, every they post one picture in

instagram

or change with new ones, if though they superstar, it depends

also

depend on children's behaviour, as well. To sum up, I believe that, there are clear reasons why

internet

Suggestion

the internet

and social media are harmful for every individual and these will bring negative attitudes which strictly affect on human.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

304 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Include an introduction and conclusion

An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers are leaving their own poor countries to work in developed countries.

Many people believe that every individual is responsible for his/her own healthy lifestyle. Others believe that governments should take care of it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

some people think the money they earn should be enjoyed by spending it now,while others thinks that their earnings should be saved for future.discuss both views and give your opinion.

What is your preference when you are going to by a new electronic device: friend recommendation or read magazines, newspaper or an article? Give reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Some countries are considering imposing curfews in which teenagers will not be allowed outdoors at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this policy?