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Some people say that every human being can create art, for example painting. Others think only the people born with the ability can create art. Discuss both view and give your opinion?

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Nowadays
art
 is considered as one of the most popular activities which distracts from everyday routine. Here is
plethora
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a plethora
 of advocates who believe that everybody can make
art
, and opponents of that topical question. In
this
 essay I intend to delve into the benefits of both
viewpoint
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viewpoints
.
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.
Firstly
,
art
 is becoming more popular in modern society and
overwhelming majority
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the overwhelming majority
 of people increasingly doing
art
.
Moreover
,
this
 activity uses not only like
buffer
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a buffer
 against
stress which
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stress, which
 breaks the monotony of everyday routine but
also
 like handmade present.
Furthermore
, it is a good opportunity for earning some money, selling them in different kind of exhibitions. Doing
this
 frequently, human could become famous, even leave a mark on the history of
art
. Advocates of gifted people note that greatest
art artists
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art, artists
 were talented in their area
,
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,
 and believe that nobody can acquire dowry if you were not born with it. In fact, for many of them, creating
art
 is do or die.
In addition
, it does not matter how much time you spend on practice if
human
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humanity
 is not talented. To conclude, in order to become a master of
art
, being just talented it is not enough, it requires trainings, repetitions and dedication
in
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on
 a regular basis.
Additionally
, we can see numerous examples of people who were just talented and steadily lost dowry without practices.
Finally
, there are only few people who are talented by nature, while others enhance their skills in
this
 field by doing lots of training.
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