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The average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003 are shown in the bar chart below.

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Departure illustrates the information about the average price per kg of clothing which is imported into the European Union from 6 different nations in the year 1993 and 2003. Overall the imported cloth tariff declined gradually in both years. The Cloths imported from South America (Argentina and Brazil) had a higher rate than that of other Asian countries. The average cost per kilometre clothing was higher in Argentina in both years €28 and € 26, respectively. Whereas, Bangladesh exported the cheapest cost cloth in the European Union in both years less than €6. Impressive, Brazil showed exactly similar figures for the imported crude price in 1993 and 2003. Despite some fluctuations, Asian countries like China, India and Bangladesh had a higher bill of the imported cloth items in 2003 as compared to 1993. After analysing the Asian countries, it seems that China's cost rose sharply in 2000 €17 than that of other nations. To conclude the average amount per kilometre clothing in all nations declined gradually in 1993 and 2003.
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