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The chart below shows information about subway systems in three major European cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main information and making comparisons.

The chart below shows information about subway systems in three major European cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main information and making comparisons.
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The chart displayed below gives some information about the size of the subway system in three major European cities, mainly: the
London
 Underground, the
Paris
Metro
, and the
Moscow
Metro
. Each subway system is differentiated
in
Change preposition
into
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 three categories which
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 the total track length, the number of
stations
 in operation, and the number of daily passengers. Using the
metro
 on a
day to day
Add a hyphen
day-to-day
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 basis is necessary for some
people
 because it is their primary source of transportation to travel from one place to another to disregard the traffic jams caused by pedestrians and
other private and public vehicle
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another private and public vehicle
other private and public vehicles
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. So, the
metro
 is one of the
commonly
Correct quantifier usage
most commonly
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 used
mode
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modes
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 of transportation in the whole world. Focusing on the major subway system in Europe, the
London
 Underground has the longest
path
period
 with a distance of 408 km long.
While
 the
Moscow
Metro
 and
Paris
Metro
 only have a distance of 300 km and 214 km long respectively.
Second
Add an article
The second
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 focal point of
this
 topic is the sum of
stations
 per operation, the
Paris
Metro
 has hundreds of
stations
 in
operations
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operation
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 ranging up to 300
stations
while
 the
London
 Underground only has 275
stations
 and the
Moscow
Metro
 has 182
stations
.
Lastly
 is the total
passengers
Correct quantifier usage
number of passengers
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, a lot of
people
 use the
Moscow
Metro
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 is going up to 6.5 million
people
 considerably
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 has the
second
 largest
path
period
 and the least figure of
stations
. Followed by the
Paris
Metro
that is
 ranging up to 4.5 million
people
 given that it has the least
path
period
 and has the most figure of
stations
.
Lastly
, 3 million
people
 use the
London
 Underground even though it has the greatest distance in the
path
period
 and
just
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is just
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 a little bit behind
by
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in
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 the figure of
stations
 compared to the
Paris
Metro
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "lastly, second, that is, while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, paris, metro, moscow, stations, people, path, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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