Governments should spend more money on education than on recreation and sport. Do you agree or disagree?

It is a highly debatable issue whether the government should spend money on
education
or on entertaining and sports. In my
opinion I
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opinion, I
am totally agree
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totally agree
with that; the government should give the
apriority
status established in order of importance or urgency
priority
to the
education
.
Success
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Successful
education
is very important for
countries
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countries'
country's
development
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developers
developer
. It is lead to have an excellent
economy
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economic
system. Which gives the countries an opportunity to improve other fields
such
as health care systems
,
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,
commercial and manufacture. The countries
will provides
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will provide
a huge
verity
a collection containing a variety of sorts of things
variety
and excellent opportunity of jobs in different specialist.
that
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That
will happen if they have a good
out comes
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outcome
outcomes
from the
education
system.
As a result
of that, the salary of the employments will get higher and the
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
will be more comfortable
moreover
the productivity will contribute in other activity
such
as the sport and recreation. To put it in a nutshell, I pen
down saying
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down, saying
that
,
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,
education
is essential
,
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,
necessary and basement of successful country.
that
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That
leads in result to improve
other side
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the other side
of society needed and entertainment.

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