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Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today.

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Currently, there is a debate about whether the most significant environmental problems the planet is experiencing will be fixed by
technology
. I somewhat agree that
technology
 will play an important part in environmental issues. There is no doubt that
technology
 has a crucial role in many sectors and have several benefits to the following industries; health care system, economy, water resources, etc.
in
Suggestion
In
 particular, on the environment, which has been proven in many cases in the past.
In other words
,
technology
 has reduced the number of destruction of property and loss of life when we are facing natural disasters.
For instance
, in 2007, the Thai government has received an emergency notification to evaluate people to safer areas due to Tsunami was approaching and about to hit the south of Thailand.
As a result
,
technology
 has saved several lives in Thailand, and If we do not have the
technology
 the circumstance would have been worsen.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 possible to make the opposing case that we cannot rely only on
technology
 machinery only and expect it to solve every environmental problem. People should
also
 need to take responsibility and stop doing something that create bad impacts of the world
such
 as throwing plastics in the oceans, disobey regulation and release emit CO2 emissions as well as deforestation. In conclusion, I would concede that
technology
 is an important tool, which helps to reduce a number of impacts which caused by natural disasters.
However
, most environmental issues are created by humans.
Therefore
, humans
also
 need to take action and responsibility for their behaviour in order to fix a crucial environmental problems.
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