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Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed materials should be used. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Online tool for reading is believed
that is
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 a good way for
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child
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children
a child
,
on the other hand
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, paper textbook is believed by other people that prefer than online. In my opinion, using online tools is preferable for children.
However
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, teachers and parents should take care what
child
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use
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 for it. I have two reasons that tend to agree that using online tools is preferable than paper textbook.
Firstly
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, the children do not need to carry a heavy bag every time when they go to school. It may be getting tired of
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child
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the child
children
. Especially, if the
child
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 belongs to a club, it might be accelerated. When I was student, I have been
carried
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carrying
 three kilograms school bag every day, it must have been exhausted. Even though, the textbooks were used few pages each subject.
Secondly
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, the
child
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 could search on the internet that they do not understand immediately. Some children, it is difficult to question to
teacher
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teach
, because of shyness or anxiety. At that time, the internet could search quickly, easy and detailed information. The children would not need to bring big and heavy textbooks.
On the other hand
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, the children
use
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 the internet should be careful. It is, a teacher and parents have to pay attention what they
use
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.
For example
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, in school case, the teachers have to organize about a site what the children can see and have not to allow to
use
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 games. The parents
also
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 have to notice how long a
child
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use
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uses
 it. In conclusion, using the online tool for studying is useful and handy for children. But the
child
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 cannot organize properly by themselves.
Therefore
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, a teacher and parents have to take care them,
then
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, the children could be used effectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online reading materials
  • printed materials
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • technology
  • convenience
  • interactivity
  • accessibility
  • visual appeal
  • physical books
  • parental guidance
  • digital skills
  • screen time
  • learning experience
  • personal preference
  • comprehension
  • critical thinking
  • creativity
  • word recognition
  • grammar
  • vocabulary development
  • reading habits
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