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The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The chart represents the total of garbage which is generated during the period of 15 years by companies A, B, and
C
.
Overall
, constructing wasted things slightly decreased for
industry
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 A. In a similar way party,
C
was
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also
 slowly rose.
On the other hand
, for community B,
it
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expanded first,
then
 reduced dramatically.
Firstly
, in group A, the rubbish material was 12
tonnes
 in 2000,
while
 it started to decrease and reached almost 9
tonnes
 in 2015.
Similarly
, the quantity for
C
, climbed
around
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 4 to 10
tonnes
 from 2000 to 2015.
Also
, both companies met at the same point in the year 2013 and the quantity had been around 8.5
tonnes
. Alternatively, in 2000, the amount of garbage for B made almost 8
tonnes
 and
then
 it gradually increased
over
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 10
tonnes
,
whereas
 it experienced a steep fall in 2005 and went on to steadily decrease for the rest of the period and the acquired figure below 3
tonnes
 in 2015. In the meantime, it
also
 became
an
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equal
with
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C
 in 2010 which was about 7
tonnes
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words c, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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