The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of Jeans for two companies next year in Turkey.The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in Jeans at the end of next year.

The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of Jeans for two companies next year in Turkey.The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in Jeans at the end of next year.
The bar chart illustrates the information about the expected
sales
of Jeans for two companies called
Mango
group and Jack and
Jones
company
in
next
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the next
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term in Turkey.
While
the given pie chart provides
the
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data about their predicted retail stake in the coming
period
.
Overall
, the total
sales
of Jack and
Jones
group are forecast to increase more than the
mango
throughout the
period
. At the same time, Jack and Jone's team
also
look forward to holding half proportion of the total retail stake in the
next
year. During the
next
period
, both companies'
sales
awaited to increase sharply. Among them, Jack and
Jones
show more
sales
than
mango
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the mango
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association. Despite some fluctuations, the Jack and
Jones
sale anticipated
growing
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sharply from 450,000
if
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pairs (January) to 900,000 pairs (December). Even though the
mango
company
hope for gradual growth, surprisingly, their
sales
predicted
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to cross over the
sales
of the other
company
with 450000 and 500,000 respectively.
While
the
mango
company
looks ahead to hold 2/10th of the total retail proportion 20% compared to Jack and
Jones
(with 50%). During the following
period
, Other
companies
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company's
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market share is around 30%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, mango, jones, company, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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  • estimated sales
  • projected market share
  • dominant player
  • competition
  • consumer choice
  • pricing strategies
  • market trends
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