In today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence.

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modern era

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the modern era

, it is common that

both

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parents go

in the direction of

work

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and want their children to live better life with all facilities. Some people opine that the children from those families never face financial constraints, whereas others believe that parent's

absence

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absent

in those families cause few

problem

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problems

for their children like lack in support.

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situation

affect

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affects

has affected

children,

both

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positively and negatively. The people want luxurious lifestyle so they try

earn

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to earn

as much as

money

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and

also

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want their children to enjoy and

study

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in private

shool

an educational institution

school

sale

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primary reason

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the primary reason

a primary reason

why

both

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parents

work

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, In my country

study

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in private is very expensive as well as pupil requirements increase day by day in those

school

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schools

. Another reason is that, raising

price

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prices

of stuffs and foods in

future

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the future

might need more

money

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to live in

urban society

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an urban society

. For

such

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things,

both

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parents

work

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and save

money

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for upcoming future and for their

children

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child's

children's

career and want that they never face any hurdles due to lack

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money

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. For

instace

an occurrence of something

instance

, at present students after graduation want to

study

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in abroad which required more

money

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, children from the families whose

both

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parent

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parents

work

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their

in or at that place

there

do not get enough family support and attention. Sometimes they feel alone because no one is near to whom they share their problems and

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do not focus on

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study

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the study

as well. If their parents are not at home during they could make it easier to get

invovled

connected by participation or association or use

involved

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with

drugs or undertake drinking.

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, due to peer pressure they walk on

wrong path

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the wrong path

and commit crime just because lack in understanding. In conclusion, Uncertainly

both

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parents have to

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work but

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work, but

not taking care of their child is like inviting big problem for the future as well. So, I believe that

both

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parents should

spen

pass time in a specific way

spend

spent

some time with their child and make them comfortable.

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Introduction
Body paragraph 1 – Problems
Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

One of the first problems of the...
Another problem that needs to be considered...
A possible solution to this problem would be...
One immediate practical solution is to...

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

312 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

dual-income household
financial stability
extracurricular activities
role models
self-reliance
independent
emotional well-being
work-life balance
neglected
quality time

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In today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence.

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Many teenagers now have their own smart phone. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.

In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?