Some parents believe that cell phones are harmful to children, while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

It is thought by a few individuals that mobiles used have detrimental effects on the children and some other group of people not believed in the statement. I profoundly agree with the former part of a statement, as smart phone multiple dangerous causes, if children will not use under parent observation. In present days smart mobile has a vital role in everyone's
life
and it is
also
somewhere part of child's
life
. Children watching movies, shows and playing games on it. By watching the videos and playing games on a regular basis, the child's mind
also start
Suggestion
also starts
has also started
working in the same way and they act in the same manner and it's really effects on children nature and become aggressive and loud.
For example
the game by the name of Pubis and lots of children lost their
life
Suggestion
lives
because of
this
game and government ban that game.
On the contrary
, some people think that, mobile really helps children to learn new things and they are getting all the required information related to studies or general topic. It’s provide detailed knowledge and teach like a teacher.
For example
, there are many YouTube channels, those help studies to learn online and improve their studies on
next level
Suggestion
the next level
. In concluding with phones has both types of causes, some are bad and some good,
however as
Accept comma addition
however, as
smart phone becomes necessary for every one
life
and the one could not work without a mobile phone,
moreover we
Accept comma addition
moreover, we
need to practice to grow children without the help of mobile as it is always to teach children without any electronic device and give them particle example.
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