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Some parents believe that cell phones are harmful to children, while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is thought by a few individuals that mobile used have detrimental effects on the child's behave and some other group of people not believed in the statement. I profoundly agree with the former part of a group, as smart phone has multiple dangerous causes, if children will not use under parent observation. In present days smart mobile has a vital role in everyone's Life and it is
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 somewhere part of child's life. Children watching movies, shows and playing games on it. By watching the videos and playing games on a regular basis, the child's mind starts working in the same way and they act in the same manner and it's really effects on children nature and children’s become aggressive and loud.
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 the
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 by the name of Pubis, children was so influenced from the
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 and paying like anything and because of the
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 so many children lost their life and government ban that
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, some people think that, mobile really helps children to learn new things and they are getting all the required information related to studies or general topic from it. It’s provide detailed knowledge and teach like a teacher anywhere and anytime.
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, there are many YouTube channels, those help in studies to learn online and improve their studies on
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. In concluding with phones has both types of causes, some are bad and some good,
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 smart phone becomes necessary for every one life and the one could not work without a mobile phone,
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 need to practice to grow children without the help of mobile as it is always better to teach children without any electronic device and give them particle example.
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