Many people now undertake extreme activities. Why do people risk their lives in this way and do you think it's a good trend?

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Public opinion has always been divided on the subject of people who engage in extreme sports. Hobbies like skydiving, skiing, downhill, hand-gliding, mountain climbing and many others may be harmful. Why do people risk their lives for their hobbies. I will try to figure out my essay. Let’s start with the most important thing -

this

thing is adrenaline. It seems to me that the desire to experience

adrenaline

Suggestion

the adrenaline

in your veins moves people very much. People since olden times loved to play with death.

Nevertheless

, used to be gladiators and people who dive right to sharks and now they are paratroopers and hang-gliders. As far as

refers to the speaker or writer

’m

concerned I

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concerned, I

have been doing free-ride for 10 years. Free-ride - is extreme skiing.

Consequently

, I

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able to confidently say that I am

also

involved in

this

matter. When I go down the mountain

refers to the speaker or writer

don’t think about my material problems, about personal relationships and other things that haunt most people throughout life. At

this

moment in my head there are only three things: mountain, skiing and descent, and I’ll tell you that

this

is a real buzz. Just like me, people who engage in extreme activities have

this

feeling. I believe, that jumping,

for example

, with a parachute at least once in their life. People feel free and happy at these moments on

this

and risk their lives. All in all, I can confidently say that I support extreme sports.

Also

, I believe that

this

risk is justified and I advise people not to be afraid and discover something new.

Wed May 06 2020

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Many people now undertake extreme activities. Why do people risk their lives in this way and do you think it's a good trend?

Include an introduction and conclusion

you are unhappy about a plan to make your local airport bigger and increase the number of flights. You live near the airport. Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter Explain where you live Describe the problem Give reasons why you don’t want this development.

In some countries,it is illegal for companies to reject job applicants for their age.Is this a positive or negative development?

In some cultures,older people are valued most highly. In other cultures,youth is value more than experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion as to which age should be most valued.

In many corporations around the world there are fewer women than men in some management positions, and many people believe that this has created inequality in the workplace. Discuss the reasons why this is? How can we solve inequality in the workplace?