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What are the advantages and disadvantages of working in same place as other members of your family? Give reasons or examples to support your opinion?

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A job is essential to live in society. Working with relatives can be great
as well as
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 challenging. It is evident
therefore
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 that
work
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 is worship, as it’s a way to pay for our living.
Firstly
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,
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 essay will discuss how the members of the same family working in the same firm understand and respect each other.
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, it will show how there are occasions
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that become
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 challenging and uncomfortable situations.
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 with, it’s a great advantage of working with relatives in the same organization
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 able to share details about their
work
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 lives in a more intimate and understanding way.
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,
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 the emotional bonds between family members can actually have a positive
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effect
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 on individual performance and company results.
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, if you are struggling to get
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 your boss, your relative is a great way to involved and help you.
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 why we can honestly say that it’s a great privilege to
work
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 together and thoughtful choices will influence how supportive that experience turns out for you
On the other hand
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, working with family members in the same area of
organisation
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the organisation
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 may lead to challenging and uncomfortable situations.
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, emotional ties between people who are related may negatively affect their
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decisions
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 and professional growth.
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, personal, family problems or
work
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 issues brought to the
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work place
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workplace
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this
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may lead to uncomfortable situations
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for
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 other employees.
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 why, it is very important to take tough decisions that will have a negative impact on another family member.
To sum up
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, it is obvious that everyone has to
work
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 hard to find a place in the competing world. The things that make working firms so wonderful are the family involvement, the highly personal relationship and commitment, but they
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 make them challenging to sustain for the long term.

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coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion should be more clearly presented. Ensure that the main points are well supported with relevant examples and details.
task achievement
The essay addresses the topic but lacks a clear and complete response. Ensure that all aspects of the topic are thoroughly discussed and supported with comprehensive ideas.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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