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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, there is an argument that whether the disappearance of particular
species
 of plants or animals is our generation’s main environmental problem.
This
 essay will cover both sides of
this
 argument. In my perspective, I think there are more fundamental issues in our environment than the loss of a specific wildlife.
Firstly
, there are several concerns about the
impact
 to our ecosystem when some
species
 become extinct. One example reason for
this
 is how the food web would respond to
this
 drastic
change
 in ecological aspects. Some even stated that the famine could occur because there is no
such
 diversity to maintain the way we plant our crops or domesticate our livestocks.
Although
 other assumptions which may be related to the mentioned one are not as extreme as
this
, it is gaining its ground in one of the public’s interests. Still, more evidence and studies will be needed to make us
further
 understand the
impact
 of the disappearance of a specific
species
.
Secondly
, there are lots of environmentalists who are saying that most of the current problems can be traced to other problems. One
in particular
 is
climate
change
. There are loads of reputable studies from across the world that can justify
this
 argument.
For instance
, one study stated that, if the rise in atmospheric temperature reaches 2 degrees Celsius mark, there will be no point of return to stop the collapse of the world’s
climate
.
This
 dramatic
impact
 would wipe out half of the living things which live in the wild.
Therefore
, there are events in every part of the world that are dedicated to promote
climate
change
 awareness.
Lastly
, while the consequence of losing particular
species
 of plants or animals is relevant, it is more acceptable that the
impact
 of
climate
change
 is more significant and fundamental. I think that, if we succeeded in solving
climate
change
, we would address the problem of losing diversity more easily.
Hence
, there are other environmental or ecological issues which are more important.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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