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In the modern world, it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via the internet without any face-to-face contact with others. To what extent is this a positive or negative development?

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In
this
 contemporary era and fast moving
life
 people are more comfortable in buying the things online, working from
home
 and interact with family and friends from digital platform. Sometime it feels easy to deal with digitally and same
time
 we are loosening our traditions and moral responsibility towards family and society.
Firstly
, we will discuss about the negative side of digital
life
. As we are shopping online, working from
home
 and celebrating our festival online with family and friends, because we are not in the country or town and children would miss the culture and traditions.
On the other hand
 online shopping has many drawbacks, like wrong delivery, and damage products for that reason product got delayed and we need to wait more. Working from
home
 has many problems, family gets disturbed as the person has to attend an online meeting and phone calls and
home
 become
office
Suggestion
official
. In the contrary, currently we are becoming used to of current trend, as some
time
 we could not go out for a shopping and it's easy to order online within 5 to 10 minutes and we can save lots of
time
. As per today’s pandemic situation whole world is working from
home and
Accept comma addition
home, and
 that’s the best solution to save
life
Suggestion
lives
a life
. By saving the
time
 from drive to the office, we could spend quality
time
 with our family and children. To conclude,
finally
 we come across to conclude sometime is import to work from
home
 and purchase online for saving the
time
,
however other
Accept comma addition
however, other
 hand personally meeting with our family and friends plays a major role in
life
 for children and parents too.
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