Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industries to move to regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Part of society would argue that businesses should influence 55+ individuals in senior positions to retire in order to increase opportunities
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with, experienced employees are more profitable for companies, since they rarely have extra costs
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improving entrepreneur's income that may result in more jobs to the young generation.
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, studies have shown that female workers under 30 costs 3 x more than an older one, regarding the extra costs.
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, older staff is ideal mentors to the young, as their experience in the field might help them to avoid mistakes which are not taught in books,
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, these new employees could achieve high professional performances faster that if they were by themselves.
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, young employees tend to be less trustful in senior positions, because they commonly change jobs,
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employees could lose the whole investment made preparing them. To illustrate
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, the learning process of roles requires working in diverse positions not only senior ones, thanks to the fact that high-çevel positions need a general vision of the company, as a consequence, the young should work in every role to be competent to take a higher position. In conclusion,
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it is believed that older workers should retire sooner, I do believe that they are more valuable working, regarding financial benefits as well as educational advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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