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Studies have shown that in many countries the income gap between the rich and poor is ever increasing. What problems can arise from this situation and what could be done to address this situation?

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Todays world is working around the clock to achieve their dreams. Business is increasing
furiously
Suggestion
fury
. The earning capacity of people is
also
 changing. As it says moneys makes the money grow, It's happening the same things.The high society people are becoming more influential, whereas poor human's are the same.
This
 is the major reason of the huge difference between the different class in the society. In the following paragraphs, I shall be discussing the consequences and the solution for the above mention topic. Due to the widening of the ratio between the different classes of the society, there can be multiple
repocation
the state of being held in high esteem and honor
reputation
 for it.
For instance
, the higher standard people will enjoy the luxurious life, whereas poor will be still struggling for the basic requirements. The country shall not process. As only the fewest amounts of people are having the rupee and other is below the poverty line. The youngster has new fresh idea and because of them many companies make huge profits and if
this
 is not acknowledged by the bosses them human tends to lose their interest. Many companies run's because of the labour force and if they stop working,
then
 many companies will face a huge loss. I believe, There are multiple ways in which we all can help
this
 problem to solve.
For example
, Owners/bosses/ Seniors should start appreciating the work of others and start distributing the profits equally or provide the team with a better lifestyle. They should understand that their companies base is constructed by working class and they should stop taking hasty decision and they many agencies should stop the heist of money and rather let people use it. To conclude, There is no problem as huge as it seems if everyone will start things it in mature way and with the view to grow the nation.

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