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At the very moment when most of us are sitting in warm houses, and our refrigerators are full of food, somewhere very far away, millions people are on the brink of survival because of
poverty
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. The effects of
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 on society are detrimental. It affects on not only people, but
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 society on the whole. For one,
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 causes negatively impact on people. Unemployment and very low incomes, create an environment where kids can't simply go to school. As for those who can actually go to school, they simply don't see how hard work can improve their life as they see their parents fail at the task every day. A less educated work force slows down economic growth.
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, living in poor diet and inadequate medical care, the poor cannot always afford “safe” food.
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, they cope with huge amount of diseases.
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,
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 makes it clear that poor and homeless people have to live under deprivation conditions.
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,
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 is a major cause of social tensions and threatens to divide a nation because of the issue of inequalities,
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 income inequality.
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 happens when wealth in a country is poorly distributed among its citizens.
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, when a tiny minority has all the money. The Arab Spring is a good example, in all of the countries concerned, the revolts started because of the lack of jobs and high
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 levels.
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 has led to most governments being overthrown. As
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 is closely tied to social divide. In conclusion, the negative impact of
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 on social too serious to be neglected. Its influence on health, education and violence produce destabilizing and dangerous conditions and
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 propagate its cyclical nature.
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, stabilizing and empowering political institutions is a crucial part of fighting against the dangerous consequences of
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