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In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas and towards urban areas. Why do you think that is? What problems can this cause?

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Nowadays, a common trend observed in many parts of the world is the mass migration of individuals from rural to urban communities; they cite monetary benefits like increased pay, better job prospects as well finer education offered by urban areas as main reasons. Whist, all the reasons mentioned above are advantageous, there are some drawbacks which need to be considered; these include increased
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 pollution, more traffic congestions, expensive
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 decreased ties with our
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, urban
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 brings with it a myriad of problems,
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 includes increased
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 pollution as more and more houses tend to be tightly packed resulting in less clean
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. The smoke, from our kitchens, cigarettes and cars gets inhaled by inhabits resulting in severe health problems like lung cancer.
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, traffic congestions in urban regions are much more than rural communities leading to increased number of accidents.
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, urban lifestyles tend to very expensive and might not be sustainable for average income families; the housing, grocery as well as education costs tends to be exponentially more costly in urban areas.
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, by choosing to move
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 and
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 way from our birth places we are essentially forgetting our ties to the
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. Most people living in urban communities tend to lead a very busy
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, they usually have very little time to spare for
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 whist those living in rural communities tend to be very close knit. In my opinion, the benefits offered by rural areas
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 as cleaner
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, better ties to the
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 as well as a significantly less expensive
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 are better in the long term.
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