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Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise ? What can be done about this problem ?

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Individuals those who are
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Those individuals who are
 associated with any job do not devote much
time
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 in workouts, and even in their leisure
time
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, do not do any sort of
exercises
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exercise
.
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, they get affected
with
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by
 several health issues
such
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 as obesity, heart
attackand
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attack and
 many more........,
such
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 situations are stimulated mainly because they lead a sedentary lifestyle. Everyone, nowadays, is busy with something.
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, they have no enough
time
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 for practices. Every working person
do spend
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does spend
 at least 8-10 hours at workplaces and afterwards it is hardly easy for them to invest
time
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 in a gym; after a shift,
for instance
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, they do lose their stamina and strength,
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, they feel extremely indolent
then
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 they just would like to rest at home.
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, the commons those
are connected
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connect
 with works, they get monotonous from their hectic
schedules, so,
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schedules, so
 whenever they obtain any
time
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-off, they merely want to enjoy it with their families, and half of them allocate their holidays in front of
TV
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the TV
 or computer watching movies and other entertainment programmes.
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, the governments and the organisations can take
such
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 actions that are favourable for them-
such
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 as exercise should be mandatory at every workplace so as employees can acquire benefits out of it and those steps must be enforced.
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, workers should be vigilant about the affirmative aspects of workouts because if they would be healthy, they can carry out their duties more effectively.
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 to
this
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, a certain sport activity should be implemented at
worksite
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the worksite
, just for some
time
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 like 10 minutes, and all staff must be
participated
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participating
 in them. To conclude, exercise is a necessary tool for a heal mind and a healthy body.
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 doing occupations, folks should
also
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 practise: and they can keep themselves away from serious illness. The authority and management must take care of those who are working for them.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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