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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

#people #work #company #organisation
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In today's
world
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, the number of people have self-employment is rising due to
spirit
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the spirit
a spirit
 of entrepreneurship
.
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.
 Individuals choose to
work
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 for themselves rather than
work
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 for a company or organisation. In the industrialized
world
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, companies expect a lot of
work
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 from their employees. According to their opinion
,
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,
any
work
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 should be done anytime regardless of weekdays and weekends. Many employees
work
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 for underpaid or some of them is facing with mobbing in their
work
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 place. These challenging circumstances
encourages
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encourage
 people to open their
business
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. The purpose of these people is a create a new
business
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 model for them in order to act freely in the
work
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 they do, adjust working hours according to their will and to do management issues by themselves. These people are those with an entrepreneurial spirit. If we look at the big companies in the
World
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, all of the
ceo's
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ceos
chaos
cues
 come from self-employment and turn their
busineesses
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
businesses
business
business'
to
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into
 big ones.
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, there can be some disadvantages of being self
employment
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employed
. One of the drawbacks is not knowing what will happen
next
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 in constantly changing
world
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.
For instance
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, an outbreak
occured
come to pass
occurred
 in China at the end of 2019, which named
covid
made for or formed by carving
carved
-19 by the
World
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 Health Organisation. It
first
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 appeared in China
then
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, spread all over the
world
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. As part of precaution to spread of the virus, many countries had to close
shops
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shop
,
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,
stores and other
business
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. Many businesses were not prepared for
this
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 nationwide
crisis which
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crisis, which
 led to bankrupt of small
business
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 and self-employed individuals. In conclusion
,
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,
self-employing is becoming a trend that increases regularly. Individuals prefer
work
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 freelance order to create a
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work place
a place where work is done
workplace
 that they desire, but there may be some drawback of that to be aware and be prepared for.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomy
  • work-life balance
  • earning potential
  • job satisfaction
  • financial risk
  • irregular income
  • job security
  • financial instability
  • benefits
  • health insurance
  • paid leave
  • retirement plans
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