Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

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In recent times,
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of constant media attention and huge salaries have sparked heated debates about whether sports professionals deserve
such
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huge income comparing to other important professions
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as top surgeons, scientists or political leaders who have responsibilities of governing the whole
country
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. On one hand, some people believe that sports professionals who earn a great deal of
money
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are
the hard
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the hardest
workers in their respective field. There are manifold reasons for
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beliefs.
Firstly
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, people often have
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opinion argued that the number of professionals with real talent are very few, and the
money
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is recognition of the audacity and hardworking nature of an athlete, who relishes with the victory.
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, competition is constant and a player is tested every time they perform in their relatively short career.
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, the pressure from
media
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the media
is intense and there is little privacy out of
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the spotlight
.
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but not least, there is a huge number of sport persons compared to those who have become successful and having huge salary. It takes lots of practice, skills and time
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become
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a sport icon
.
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, entertainment plays an essential role in our every
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day’s
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day
life. We all need to relax, watching TV with our favourite TV stars or favourite football players. Entertainment is one of the best ways to eliminate stress and tension and leave all troubles behind.
For Instance
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, I cannot stay home all
day
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long without watching TV. So, basically, I believe that famous athletes and entertainers have
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high salaries because we need them. They like doctors for our minds and soles. Scientists say that people usually spend the same amount of
money
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for their food and entertainment. I think
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fact tells a lot. Seen in
this
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light, it is clearly unfounded to claim that a great deal of
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sport professionals received is not justified and fair.
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, it is
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believed that various professions
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as engineers,
doctors etc
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doctors, etc.
doctors etc.
, who contribute to making
world
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the world
run smoothly, are getting less salary than sports professionals. Doctors put at least ten years
to
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of
study and training, their work to save
life
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lives
. Engineer studied around 8 years and make number equipment which is used in
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to
day
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life and invent new products every
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. Teachers educate and inspire young people to be a responsible citizen. It is
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argued that if these professionals don’t get more in our
country
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than they decide to migrate to developed
country
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.
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, our developing
country
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face lots of problems. It is undeniable that as they are running our
country
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, they deserve to get
same salary
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the same salary
as sportsmen. After having discussed the most pertinent points of the issue, I, personally, advocate the
later
referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)
latter
view and agree with a notion that the sports professionals with suffice tendency to accomplish something in their career are justified to acquire huge earnings. It clearly depicts that,
sports professions
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sports, professions
has
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have
more value than other essential professions around the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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