The bar chart below shows how frequently people in USA are in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The bar chart below shows how frequently people in USA are in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
The bar chart compares the proportion of Americans who consumed fast
foods
During
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10 years.
It is clear that
the percentage of
people
who ate fast
foods
every day and never
are
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is
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about 4 per cent and 5 per cent.
By contrast
, the amount of Americans who consumed fast food once a week and once or twice a month or higher at about 32% and 30%
overall
. It is noticeable that the relative amount of
people
who went to
the
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apply
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restaurants several times a week or a few times a year
are
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is
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around 17%and 14%
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in totally
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totally
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.
Subsequently
, it can be seen that the number of
people
who ate fast
foods
in terms of how frequently they eat
increasing
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increased
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significantly between every day up to once a week.
Furthermore
, as we can see the percentage of
people
who consumed fast
foods
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food
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rarely in a month less than that
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, for example,
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for example
a few times a year or never, reduce greatly in all 3 years.
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