The bar chart below shows how frequently people in USA are in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
The bar chart compares the proportion of Americans who consumed fast
foods
During
10 years.
Change preposition
Over
It is clear that
the percentage of people
who ate fast foods
every day and never are
about 4 per cent and 5 per cent.Change the verb form
is
By contrast
, the amount of Americans who consumed fast food once a week and once or twice a month or higher at about 32% and 30% overall
.
It is noticeable that the relative amount of people
who went to the
restaurants several times a week or a few times a year Correct article usage
apply
are
around 17%and 14% Correct subject-verb agreement
is
Change preposition
in totally
totally
. Change the word
total
Subsequently
, it can be seen that the number of people
who ate fast foods
in terms of how frequently they eat increasing
significantly between every day up to once a week.
Wrong verb form
increased
Furthermore
, as we can see the percentage of people
who consumed fast foods
rarely in a month less than thatFix the agreement mistake
food
Add the comma(s)
, for example,
for example
a few times a year or never, reduce greatly in all 3 years.Submitted by sarvnaz.shadi2000 on
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