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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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 day and age, international
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 is boosting among countries in the globe and can make enormous financial profits.
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, there is concern about tension rather than understanding. I believe that international
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 has some different cultural background. On the one side, international
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 is the best way to create bridges between different cultures of the world when people from adversity cultures come together, they are faced to different parts of the world and gain knowledge about other cultures, languages and philosophies. In fact,
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 knowledge can cause to raise awareness and respects between global cultures, as people can understand about other people's cultural values.
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, as western travel to eastern countries, they learn about distinct cultural aspects from natives and prepare themselves to experiencing customs and food which has close bonds between the eastern and western worlds.
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 the other hand, international
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 might create conflict between people from different cultures in critical situations when differing cultures collide. Every
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 has special own customs, values and belief systems and international
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 can bring different fields of cultures in one place and so create several ideas from the same local.
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, an individual who comes from liberal
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 when he visits a place with religious
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 and may face with severe tension between the two different cultural backgrounds. In conclusion, some people believe that international
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 lead to tension between different
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, while I personally think that there is no reason why international
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 create misunderstanding between people.
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