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More and more people want to own items, such as cars, clothing and other things, that are made by famous brands. What are the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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These days, many people are buying branded things
such
 as cars, clothes, mobile phones and other things.
This
 is because the standard of living of people is improving and
such
 branded things long
last
 and are too comfortable.
However
, in my view,
this
 trend is a negative
development
 as buying branded things is a waste of
money
 and many people buy for show-off their
status
. There are many reasons why most people these days want to purchase branded clothes, cars and phones.
Firstly
, the life of people is improving because of having a good job. As it is being observed, particularly, in metro cities, that the standard of living of the people is improving day by day by having a decent job, resulting in they prefer to have branded things rather than having cheap one.
For instance
, the majority of people in Mumbai are buying an iPhone mobile phone because it has a
status
 symbol and known for its brand.
Secondly
, it is believed that these branded items are durable, so buying
such
 items are enough worthy for the pocket.
Lastly
, most people buy
such
 items owing to having the comfort after using it.
However
, keeping the aforementioned views, in my opinion,
this
 is a negative trend for an individual as well as
society
. On the one hand, in terms of an individual, why
this
development
 is negative because buying
such
 costly items is a waste of
money
. If the individual wants to buy a costly phone that cost $1,000 as it is branded, he or she can have the same phone with the same features at $500; due to
this
 not only will
this
 save their
money
, but
also
 get the thing with same features.
On the other hand
, in terms of
society
, the reason why
this
 is a negative
development
 because having
such
 branded things is showing-off
status
. It is true that many people in
society
 are not wealthy, but buying or wearing branded things give them the
status
 of the rich even though they are not in real life. These make me feel that it is a negative
development
. In conclusion, most people prefer having branded things
instead
 of a cheap one is possible because of improvements in the standard of living.
Nonetheless
, in my thinking,
this
 is a negative trend as it is not a proper utilization of
money
 and show off to
society
.
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