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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this element?

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Government has to spend money on both roads and railways in a way, how we deal with two important things in parallel. They have to develop roadways and which is used by a wide range of people in day to day activities. Railways need to develop to increase the ease of transportation. Despite of spending more money on rail, need to develop the pathways in villages. For an instance, few villages closer to forest area, they don't even have pavement to reach another place or city. It is hard for them to get done with their basic needs.Imagine, students are still going by walk to their school by foot for two to three kilometres. I strongly feel pavement that too good pathway is the basic need of the public. At the same time, I am not denying on spending funds to increase the transportation medium which is the top most priority to grow economically and socially. I am concluding by saying, authorities are well educated enough to spend or distribute the money based on their country needs and social demands. There is a saying if you plan well, which helps in constant development, which every human looking forward. At
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 am not agreeing with the statement, the government should spend more funds on railways rather than roads.

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