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Many people these days choose to work abroad after graduation. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages.

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The tendency of working overseas after graduation is increasingly prevalent to the young generation. In my opinion, while there are certain benefits, its drawbacks are more significant. As the world has been globalized, people prefer working in a foreign country, and
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 could have a positive effect on people’s lives to some extent. Being able to work overseas, people can make friends with foreigners so they could build a stronger social relationship, which can be easily achieved by actively communicating with others.
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, so-called relationships facilitate people to perform better in the workplace as the
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, apart from the benefits expressed above, I believe that the option of working abroad is perhaps even more damaging because of the effect of language barriers. Individuals, who work in a foreign country, often find it extremely difficult to express their thoughts and feelings
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 of talking different languages.
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 associated with reduced quality and performance among people at work. Another disadvantage caused by language barriers is that
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 difficulty could make foreigners misunderstand what people say in some contexts.
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 leads to reduced human interaction among people. In conclusion,
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 the option of working aboard is becoming popular among people today, I believe that the downsides of
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 trend would overshadow the benefits.

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