You were hurt in a minor accident in a supermarket and you wish to make a complaint. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter: give details about who you are give details about the accident suggest how the supermarket could prevent similar accidents.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing regarding an accident that occurred in your supermarket
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Monday afternoon. My name is Lolo Ahmed, and I am a 20-year-old woman from Saudi Arabia. I have been living in Jeddah since I was young, and I am currently studying for a master's degree at the University of Jeddah. I am a regular customer and visit your shop on a daily basis.
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I was walking in the frozen food section, a piece of glass suddenly fell off the shelf and struck my arm. I had to be taken to the hospital to receive stitches. I recommend you
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ensure that glass items are placed securely on the shelves to prevent them from falling. I would
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like to suggest that you install signs warning customers of the potential dangers associated with glass products. Kind regards, Lolo Ahmed

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Try to add more details about how the accident made you feel or its impact on your daily life.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to add more linking words between your sentences for a smoother flow.
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Consider adding a request for a response or a follow-up from the supermarket.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear structure with a proper greeting and closing.
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You have explained the accident well and made good suggestions for improvement.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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