The mark of a successful person is to be wealthy and have a successful career. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays,

both

education

and

experience

are regarded as useful for success

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some people say that

education

is much better than

experience

, while others think that

experience

is much more useful,

thus

many people have different ideologies concerning the matter of jobs for younger students. So

thus

these

both

views will now be discussed.

Firstly

, let's speak about academic

education

. Almost eighty percent of the people believe that

education

is needed to pursue a good career, and

thus

the result of many youngsters

are

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given academic

education

, be it at home or school.

Education

is said to be the source of power; if a person has

good

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a good education

education

and is very literate,

then

wealth and respect

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have been

are being

always there for him. ‘Knowledge is power’, is a very famous quote, it is easily understandable, it means that

education

and literacy

always gives

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always give

you wealth and respect. So

thus

education

is very useful and so it promises a very successful life.

Then

comes the argument of

experience

, again

experience

also

a very useful thing, which is seen and

countedamong

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counted among

employers. The jobs which offer the most require, usually, a minimum of at least 4-8 years

experience

, so

thus

many youngsters and teenagers are given the

experience

of work, so that later on they

don'thave

Suggestion

don't have

trouble in seeking jobs, later. So normally

experience

too gives aid for people who need a job, and makes a good combination with

education

Lastly I

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Lastly, I

would just like to say that

both

education

and

both

experience

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experiences

are good and useful in their own way, and our not better than each other, they are equally good, and make an extremely useful combination.

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The mark of a successful person is to be wealthy and have a successful career. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Fully explain your ideas

In the past, many male leaders have led our society to conflicts and violence. The world would be better governed and more peaceful if it was ruled by women. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

in some countries university students live at home with their family while they study, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city.

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The only way to improve safety on our roads is to give much stricter punishments for driving offences. What extent do you agree or disagree?