The mark of a successful person is to be wealthy and have a successful career. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays,
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education
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and
experience
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are regarded as useful for success
,
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,
some people say that
education
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is much better than
experience
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, while others think that
experience
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is much more useful,
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many people have different ideologies concerning the matter of jobs for younger students. So
thus
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these
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views will now be discussed.
Firstly
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, let's speak about academic
education
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. Almost eighty percent of the people believe that
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is needed to pursue a good career, and
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the result of many youngsters
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is
given academic
education
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, be it at home or school.
Education
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is said to be the source of power; if a person has
good
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a good education
education
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and is very literate,
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wealth and respect
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have been
are being
always there for him. ‘Knowledge is power’, is a very famous quote, it is easily understandable, it means that
education
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and literacy
always gives
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always give
you wealth and respect. So
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education
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is very useful and so it promises a very successful life.
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comes the argument of
experience
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, again
experience
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is
also
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a very useful thing, which is seen and
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counted among
employers. The jobs which offer the most require, usually, a minimum of at least 4-8 years
experience
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, so
thus
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many youngsters and teenagers are given the
experience
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of work, so that later on they
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don't have
trouble in seeking jobs, later. So normally
experience
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too gives aid for people who need a job, and makes a good combination with
education
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.
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Lastly I
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Lastly, I
would just like to say that
both
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education
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and
both
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experience
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experiences
are good and useful in their own way, and our not better than each other, they are equally good, and make an extremely useful combination.
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