Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. what is your opinion about this ?

I think it is important to keep my

house

and

workplace

tidy and clean with all things managed and in the correct situation. Why is

this

? My home must be tidy to keep my families safe. If my home is tidy and electricity lines and toys and shoes and books are organised and in the correct place no one is going to fall over and damage to their body. One day my friend Mohsin walked into his home to answer a person that comes to his

house

door. He looked at the door. He didn't look at the floor and he falls over one shoe and

then

he went to the hospital to have his head swam.

Furthermore

, if people arrive and my

house

is non-tidy,

then

I can suffer embarrassed. My family and my friends like to see my

house

tidy and clean. I like in my

house

clean. My

workplace

must be tidy so everything is organised. If my

workplace

is organised I think I can do more

work

. I can do

this

work

because all my time is for my

work

. Sometimes I go to

work

and all my time I have to spend looking for my

work

. My desk is dirty and paper is all over the top and my time is taken by looking for what I want to do and what I need to do.

This

is so terrible and now I think it is important to keep my

workplace

managed and all things in the correct situation.

Also

, if I need to find pens or pencils it is easy when organised. To conclude, in a nutshell, keep

house

and

workplace

tidy is a good thing because I can find my things, my family like it, it is safe.

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

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