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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind the bars. To what extent do you agree?

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In olden days there is no jail and the concept of
police station
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the police station
. Criminals used to get punishment on the spot by assigning some works around their villages.
Nowadays if
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Nowadays, if
 someone committed the mistake or a crime, the government simply putting them in the prison and providing the meals and all the necessary things. The punishment
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 depends on the political
back ground
a person's social heritage: previous experience or training
background
 and the
recommandations
something (as a course of action) that is recommended as advisable
recommendations
. I strongly feel
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 of putting them behind the bars
,
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,
 assign some community
work
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to
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with
 those prisoners by paying nothing policy.
This
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 will help in improving their behaviour
.
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.
 If they haven't been assigned with any of the
work
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,
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,
 some evil thoughts might revolve in their brain. Despite of letting them sit idle, assign some
work
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 which is useful for others and increase
morality
the quality or state of being mortal
mortality
. My conclusion is prisoners should be assigned some social
work
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. If they are in a room
with out
in absence of
without
 social interaction, their minds will be corrupted with the evil thoughts and the depression.

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