Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind the bars. To what extent do you agree?

In olden days there is no jail and the concept of
police station
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the police station
. Criminals used to get punishment on the spot by assigning some works around their villages.
Nowadays if
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Nowadays, if
someone committed the mistake or a crime, the government simply putting them in the prison and providing the meals and all the necessary things. The punishment
also
depends on the political
back ground
a person's social heritage: previous experience or training
background
and the
recommandations
something (as a course of action) that is recommended as advisable
recommendations
. I strongly feel
instead
of putting them behind the bars
,
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,
assign some community
work
to
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with
those prisoners by paying nothing policy.
This
will help in improving their behaviour
.
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.
If they haven't been assigned with any of the
work
,
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,
some evil thoughts might revolve in their brain. Despite of letting them sit idle, assign some
work
which is useful for others and increase
morality
the quality or state of being mortal
mortality
. My conclusion is prisoners should be assigned some social
work
. If they are in a room
with out
in absence of
without
social interaction, their minds will be corrupted with the evil thoughts and the depression.

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