-----Prison is the best punishment for criminals. Discuss.

Todays, with the sharp increase in crime rate, different kinds of
punishment
like life imprisonment, capital
punishment
, community services, and etc.
has
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Has
been created. Many believe that
prison
is the best
punishment
for criminal while others are against
this
idea. I can see both sides of the argument. In
this
essay I’m going to justify my opinion and give some reasonable answers for
this
plural of "this"
these
two points of view. I strongly think that
prison
must be a place that rehabilitates criminal and makes them to rethink about themselves.
Prison
may be the best
punishment
when prevent offenders committing crime.
For example
, inmates can be taken part in some sports activities or cultural programs. The vast majority of criminals are ill-educated. It could be effective if they pass some training course and be taught to understand that they can be useful for their society and they can feel better.
On the other hand
,
prison
does not affect to
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
people as same as others.
That is
to say, some people don’t want to change their lifestyle even if, they have to do community services or they have to endure horrible situations. In
this
case the
prison
changes to a comfortable place for them and an unsuitable place for vulnerable criminals. Some young adults that just had done a
little
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few
petty crimes have to rub shoulders with dangerous offenders like murderers or rapists and sex criminals. Some people argue that
prison
as a means of
punishment
is always enough. They think that
prison
is able to rehabilitate murderers too. They don’t consider that these offenders might repeat taking another life. All things considered,
although
prison
play
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plays
a good role as a
punishment
for some of the crimes, it is likely to have
awful impact
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an awful impact
to some inmates. It might be better if government
divide
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divides
prison
to
being one more than one
two
separated parts for different kinds of crimes.
Any way I
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Anyway, I
Anyway I
can’t say
prison
is the best way of
punishment
for all sorts of offences, but it is able to be one. ---
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