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Some people think books are losing importance as a source of information and entertainment. To what extent do you agree?

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To a large extent I agree that books are losing importance as a
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 and entertainment. I believe that
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 is mainly due to the technology advancement. Nowadays, people can actually get access to books on the internet. They can borrow and watch it whenever, or wherever they are. They could just carry a mobile device and browse the books they want,
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 of going to libraries or book store to borrow or buy one, which may be much heavier and requires a higher
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monetary
 cost and time cost. Some online books have audio attached, which people can listen to it while reading it, which is more interesting. Since the technology is providing a much more convenient and less costly way for people to read books as a
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 and entertainment, books are indeed losing their importance. The internet is now the dominant
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 of
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. It provides lots of historical and updated
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, obviously much up-to-date, comparing
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being one more than one
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 books that need a long time before they are published.
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 of walking around searching number of books for just a little
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, people can just type in keywords and find lots of related
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 the t they want to get. Typing the words and finding the meaning is much faster than flipping through pages using a paper dictionary. Phones or computers become the gadgets that people always bring along and use every day. By using these gadgets, people can actually entertain themselves a lot.
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, using the social media, where people can get very updated news every moment, and constantly stalk on their idols, etc. They can follow the trends in
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 way, which can
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 gain recognition from others. The social media do have functions that make people glued to it continuously,
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, the ‘
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, some people still think that books are a more reliable
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 of
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. As the
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 attain of the internet may be edited by lots of different viewers, which may not be entirely correct.
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, some people may think reading online can affect your eyesight and health. Not everyone can afford online gadgets or a good network. Some may end up watching other things
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 of searching for
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 as well.
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, to a large extent I think that books are losing importance as a
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 and entertainment.

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