Stress-related illness are becoming increasingly common. What do you think are the causes of this problem? What solutions can you suggest?

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In present generation people are busy with their job life, and they all have huge competition in a market which is one of the major causes for increasing
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illness. In
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essay I would like to express my point of view of its cause and would like to suggest solutions with relevant examples. To start with, In old days there was not much of a struggle in the market and everybody lives happily and as there was no challenge between workers there was not much
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due to which people were healthy.
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, In old day if someone is working in an organization they know their roles and they don'
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compete for higher post so the person who got selected as Co worker stay as Co worker or person who got selected for labour work he does only that don'
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think about getting to a higher position as supervisor in that particular field. But, that has changed in the present generation, people want to get head of another. It is like a race, peoples tend to endeavour day and night to even get ahead of other by little. Due to which they don'
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have good health and they are more in
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stress which
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overall effect with work and their life.
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80% peoples have a more
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stress illness
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stress, illness
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illness
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compared with 2015.
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is due to huge competition and as well as for job security. If you are not better at your production
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there is change of you losing your job and someone else will replace your position. So to reduce
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all
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organization should provide them with the security of their jobs and as well as give every employee to grow equally. Giving them holiday for a little longer period can reduce their
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and as well it will affect their effort and ideas which will help in the improvement of the company. To summarize, I believe rivalry is important to give an objective to achieve something, but we shouldn'
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take too much
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on achieving that it affects our health badly due to which
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of achieving our objective we go farther from it. We should do our task with relaxing the mind.The organization should have seminar for
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relief so their employees are in good shape and
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free.
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