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Prison is the best punishment for criminals do You agree or disagree ?

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It is irrefutable that prison is the best punishment for every criminals. A certain segment of the Nation that law enforcement agencies should give a chance to change their life. While other opine that the Government should give the death sentence to criminals. I completely agree with the following statement. I would like to explicate it at length in the paragraph to come.
To Begin
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 with, the
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 and the foremost that to prevent the
crime
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 Government must punish the criminal because of punishment they realise that they should not crimes.
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 point we can consider that rape cases have been increased day by day all over the world because most rape cases have pending in the court In
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 reason the criminals do not afraid the punishment and they do
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 again and again.
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, Law enforcement agencies should give the death sentence to criminal.
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, one more convince point that cannot be ignored that the
crime
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also
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 bad effect to the society if the government do not punish the criminal than number of criminal will increased in society hand to hand.
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 point we can consider that the drug business is most effective for criminals because they sell the drug to earn high income
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 death sentence is the better option for criminals. After over all the analysis, it can be concluded that
crime
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 is dangerous for all over the world so legislature assembly should make the law and the court must execute the law.
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