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Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give you own opinion.

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ple have different views about the important role and working in museums. Some people think that the purpose of museums should be exciting for entertaining, while others people consider they should be educational placed. In my opinion, good museums should be for both entertaining and educational.
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, museums can be an exciting place for people who love a fun. May be it helps to decrease to commit a crime. Because, if museums are interesting place, a lot of young people visit it and they spend previously time useful something
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 of poor video games and others in social media. More and more museums should be provided fantastic display and even bring interesting games which relate to history culture, attracting large number of tourists.
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, museums should be interesting to people as well as they should focus on education. Namely, the aim of any exhibitions should teach any visitors something that they did not widely know.
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happens with different ways, some museums have professional guides to take their visitors, while others museums offer headsets so that visitors can listen to detailed commentary about the exhibitions. So that, museums can play key role in teaching people about the history, culture, science and any past aspect of life. To conclude, I think that a good museum sets up both entertaining and educational experiences, so that people can have a fun and learning something the same time. And
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 it happens after ten years a lot of people.

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