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Most of the people fail to connect the relevant of visiting museums. Why is it so? What can be done to clear this perception.

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The occasional
visiting
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of
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museums
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fail
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 to link the majority of
people
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. For
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 , several reasons are there which cannot create the enthusiasm in
people
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 to visit
museums
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.
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 , there are some solutions to clear
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 critical thinking of
people
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. A museum is an education country fair
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 rich with exciting things for individuals to explore and discover through touch and inquiry.
Museums
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provides
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a unique opportunity for
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people
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 to explore various concepts of art galleries, social science and ancient history.
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 , vastly
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 feel bored and they visit
museums
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 just for entertainment rather than to gain knowledge.
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 feel that
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 they can get tired of walking for hours in
museums
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 and they might miss the socialising with friends and the beautiful outdoor experience in cities. The government and educational institutions are able to create awareness and can help to redeem
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people
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 about
museums
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. The school should conduct
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museum trips for students so that they get to know more about it and can enhance the importance
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 it. The government should support the
museums
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for
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 conducting seminars to create recognition and significance of
museums
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.
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 , the infrastructure of
museums
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 should be creative with a
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 board
of
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explaining the history of a particular art , so that
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people
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 get
interest
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to know
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in knowing
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 about arts and
museums
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.
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,
museums
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merely
place
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 where we can get a perfect example of history, for that
people
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 think that it is a waste of time and
failed
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 to attach to it. For that government and educational institutions can take steps to create and enhance the interest of
people
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 and clear
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 critical concept.
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