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The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000.

The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000.
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The bar chart provides the information about
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 total product produced
from
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 the IT and
Service
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Industry
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 in Britain between 1992 and 2000. It is measured in percentages. The
percentage
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 of GDP of the IT
Industry
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 increased significantly,
whereas
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 the
Service
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Industry
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 was noticeably lagging behind.
Overall
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, the IT
Industry
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 experienced an upward trend,
while
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 the
Service
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 showed a tendency to decrease throughout the period. Both industries’ release rates had a steady and
an
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increasing
percentage
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 of GDP. The IT
Industry
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’s
manufacture
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manufacturing
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 was about 6% in 1992,
being
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higher than the
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Service’s
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 rate by exactly 4%.
Then
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, it rose to slightly higher than 8% in 1994.
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, the figure showed a gradual decrease to about fully 8% in 1996.
On the other hand
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, in 1998, the IT
Industry
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 attained a sharp leap forward to 12%. At
such
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 a significant pace,
the
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IT achieved 15% and showed a big differential in comparison with the
Service
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Industry
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.
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Percentage
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The percentage
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 of GDP of the
Service
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Industry
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 was 4% in 1992. Between 1992 and 1994, the
Industry
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’s ratio increased to 6%. In 1996, the ratio increased by a small degree, by 7%. As the given chart shows, in 1998, the
industry
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 earned another 0.5
percent
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,
thus
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 reaching as much as 7.5
percent
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per cent
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. In total, it rose to precisely 8%, but it remained to be lower in terms of
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 achieved than
the
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IT by half as much.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words service, industry, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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