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The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000.

The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000.
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The bar chart provides the information about
internal
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the internal
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 total product produced
from
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 the IT and
Service
Industry
 in Britain between 1992 and 2000. It is measured in percentages. The
percentage
 of GDP of the IT
Industry
 increased significantly,
whereas
 the
Service
Industry
 was noticeably lagging behind.
Overall
, the IT
Industry
 experienced an upward trend,
while
 the
Service
 showed a tendency to decrease throughout the period. Both industries’ release rates had a steady and
an
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increasing
percentage
 of GDP. The IT
Industry
’s
manufacture
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manufacturing
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 was about 6% in 1992,
being
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higher than the
Service’s
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 rate by exactly 4%.
Then
, it rose to slightly higher than 8% in 1994.
However
, the figure showed a gradual decrease to about fully 8% in 1996.
On the other hand
, in 1998, the IT
Industry
 attained a sharp leap forward to 12%. At
such
 a significant pace,
the
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IT achieved 15% and showed a big differential in comparison with the
Service
Industry
.
Percentage
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 of GDP of the
Service
Industry
 was 4% in 1992. Between 1992 and 1994, the
Industry
’s ratio increased to 6%. In 1996, the ratio increased by a small degree, by 7%. As the given chart shows, in 1998, the
industry
 earned another 0.5
percent
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,
thus
 reaching as much as 7.5
percent
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per cent
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. In total, it rose to precisely 8%, but it remained to be lower in terms of
percentage
 achieved than
the
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IT by half as much.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words service, industry, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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