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What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a cashless society?

#cashless #society
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Hitherto, currency notes and coins have been mere used for transactions worldwide.
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, after getting a breakthrough in the same field, cashless medium is in vogue
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The essay discusses
pros
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the pros
 and cons of having a cashless community. As far as benefits are concerned, the
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 which I consider is various forms of electronic cash.
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 to say, modern generation has myriad type of methods
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 as credit cards, debit cards, electronic banking, mobile banking
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 they are utilised with ease where network is available.
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, they consume less time.
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, educated civilians of India use plastic
money
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 to do shopping in most of the cases.
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, as
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 mode of transaction does not require to carry cash anywhere, a robbery or a theft is out of the world
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 So, it gives more safety masses
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Especially
 children and senior citizens.
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 but not least, it is a curse for those who carry black
money
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 and do corruptions.
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, drawbacks can not be overlooked. By far the most common criticism is to big losses within
second
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 in case of cyber crime or plastic
money
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 loss. To elaborate, if either information associated with bank accounts
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 as account number, IFSC code or a plastic
money
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 is found by some hackers
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,
 large sums of
money
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is
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are
 at stake.
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, my friend, Janhvi, lost one lakh rupees while
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purchase
 flower pots through Amazon
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, hefty wealth to be spent setting up the needed infrastructure that
put
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puts
 additional burden on budgets of governments. Not to mention, it
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is
 not feasible for small
purchasing
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purchasing, such
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 as chocolates from small stall keepers. To conclude, despite of a few shortcomings
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 as cyber crime, cashless transactions need to be operated by every sort of person in order to get safe and face paced life.
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,
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 of criticising, dwellers have to utilise
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 advanced technological method.

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