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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or dis agree.

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Education is the rudimentary right of every
student
 which decides their career. So, Universities should be conscious while taking any decision in
such
 a scenario that it should enrol the equal
number
 of male and female candidates in each
subject
 may lead to the controversy. In
this
 21st century era,
gender
appers
give a certain impression or have a certain outward aspect
appears
 no big deal anymore.
Thus in
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Thus, in
 my opinion, it is no longer required
same
Suggestion
the same number
number
 of male and female candidates
instead
 of
this
 they should focus on the
subject
 they want to take as per their interest. Nowadays Women can work in each and every field.
However
, There are some duties
such
 as police in which male can do better than female as males are stronger, having
capability
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the capability
of
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to
 run fast, and less emotional than women. On
otherside
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the other side
other side
, Females can do better work as a teacher because it is
childrens'
a young person of either sex
children
 nature that they prefer to
taught
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teach
 by
female
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the female
females
a female
. For an instance, If any
student
 had hit his finger, female teacher will take him in her lap and do the remedy while male teacher will say do take care.
Thus
, Each
subject
 is different and demanding different skills and it does not require
equal
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an equal number
number
 of male and female candidates.
In addition
 to that, Every
student regardless
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student, regardless
 of
gender
 is putting efforts to get admission in
subject
Suggestion
the subject
 which they find interesting and curious about. If any varsity will reject their application even though they are fulfilling the criteria except the
gender
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gender, then
then
 it is not fair for them.
Besides
 that, from the perspective of universities they prefer to accept admissions of the
brillient
of surpassing excellence
brilliant
 students
first
. If there
is
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are
gender
criteria it
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criteria, it
 might be possibility of rejecting the
brillient
of surpassing excellence
brilliant
student
. To recapitulate, I prefer that universities should
petronize
assume sponsorship of
patronize
patronise
educands
 to choose the
subject
 of their interest
instead
 of giving importance of having
equal
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an equal number
number
 of male and female.
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