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social media is more and more popular in modern life. It brings many benefits but still has disadvantages. What is your opinion about that?

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Nowadays, the Internet is more and more developed, it makes social media more popular. Social media is very useful in modern
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it leaves a lot of effects on humans. The essay will show how it brings advantages and why it has the negative effects. Social media is known as an opportunity for education. Teachers can create discussion forums, class blogs, and teaching online. Students can study whatever and whenever they want at home without going to school. They can search any information which they don't know.
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, students must stay at home because of the spreading of the c
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 but they can study online by using the Internet on smartphones or laptops without going to school.
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 social media has a positive aspect, it has a weak point that it influences the real communication. It helps people communicate with anyone in the world without face to face, which makes them expand their relationships. But it makes them have more distance. People
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 many social media
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 as Facebook, Twitter, Instagram, and so on.
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 means that they have several friends online to communicate with. They find themselves having not enough time or energy to spend with real-
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 friends. In my opinion, despite having a disadvantage, social media will be more convenient if we
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 it correctly. When you finish our learning, you can
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 social media to relax by watching films or listening to music, but don't spend too much time on it.
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 will make you waste time and harm to your health. In conclusion, social media has both advantages and disadvantages in our
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. It is still very popular in modern
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. Let's
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 it for the right purpose to make your
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 easier.
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