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n many places , new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside

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These days, we are facing the problem that there is not enough space for new homes in the urban area due to the fast-industrial revolution happening all around the world. Some people are arguing that new homes should not be built in the countryside.
For
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In
 my opinion, it is inevitable to build the new homes in the countryside and here are the reasons.
Firstly
, due to the increasing demand
of
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for
 new homes, there has to be space available if we want to meet the demand,
otherwise
 the price of the housing in
urban area
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urban areas
an urban area
the urban area
 would keep
rise
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rising
 up to the point where low
incomers
the financial gain (earned or unearned) accruing over a given period of time
incomes
 cannot afford any of the
house
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houses
. If
this
 keeps happening, there would be people staying on the street struggling to look for the house to live and could become
such
 a serious problem. In the extreme,
this
 might lead people to commit crimes for the sake of surviving and protect their family, and
also
 there might be riots or protests that are against the government.
Secondly
, building the new homes can help the economy grow up and brings benefits to the economy. Building new homes means that more constructors will be needed to work. More houses in a new town
means
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mean
 that more restaurants and essential businesses will be in need.
This
 can bring a lot of positive
effect
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effects
 on the economy.
Furthermore
,
this
 will contribute housing market in the urban area to be more stabilized because of the supply
in
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of
 new houses. It is very important to protect the nature and keep it from the potential harms.
However
, the effort in protecting our nature would become meaningless if people have nowhere to stay and end up causing the situation uncontrollable.

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