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you see the above advertisement for a course design to help improve your memory write a letter to the organizers of the course in the letter give some background information about yourself and explain your own problems and why you would like to do the course inquire about the methods used on the course inquire about course fees and dates you should write at least 150 words you do not need to write any addresses you should begin your letter with dear Sir or Madam

#advertisement #course #design #memory #organizers #background #information #methods #fees #dates #addresses #sir #madam
Dear Sir My name is Tess. I graduated with a computer science degree
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 year and I have been working as a computer engineer since my graduation. I saw your advertisement recommending a course for improving memory. I found it useful for me.
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, I'm 26 years old, I've realized that I forget some simple tasks more frequently.As an example, I don't remember either I locked the door or not,
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 and addresses slip my mind at the moment somebody gives
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 to me.
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 issue becomes more significant when I forget to prepare the requested documents for my boss.
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, one embarrassing moment was when I was supposed to explain the obstacle in the project
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 my coworkers and my mind went blank.
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, it actually makes me disappointed
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 myself and I'm really glad that I saw your advertisement. I would be pleased if you could tell a bit about the methods applied in the course and if it desires any special requirement.
In addition
, can I ask about the fees and the date of classes so if I have to
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 my schedule to fit yours?
Finally
, thanks for your attention and exciting classes. I hope I could be capable to participate in your course.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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