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The maps below show changes that took place Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25-year period from the 1980 to 2005.

The maps below show changes that took place Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25-year period from the 1980 to 2005.
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The maps illustrate the development of a place in Youngsville in New Zealand between 1980 to 2005.
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, in 1980, there was a large
river
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 Alanah in the east of the
city
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, and
this
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river
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divided
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was divided
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 into a small
river
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 that ran in the middle of
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city
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the city
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 from east to west. To the north of the
city
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, there was a hospital close to a lake which contain
fishes
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fish
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, and it was surrounded by many
trees
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. There
were
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was
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 some
house
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houses
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 to the east of the lake. There were several basic facilities to the south of small the
river
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 Alanah
such
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 as a school, an airport area and woodland. To the east of
facilities
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the facilities
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, there was a railway station, a few
trees
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 and
house
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a house
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. Over time, there had been many changes
such
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 as a stadium and factories, but the hospital, the school and the airport section remained the same. In 2005, a lot of
trees
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 were cut, and
whole
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while
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the
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apply
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houses were demolished in
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city
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the city
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. The railway which ran from the northern to the southern was extended, and to the east of it, there was a Marina. In the north of the
city
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, there was a stadium which replaced some houses in the east of the lake. To the south of the
city
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, there was a warehouse in the middle, and some factories were dispensed around
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 area. To the east of the warehouse, two skyscrapers were constructed to replace several houses and
trees
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 before.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words river, city, trees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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